This weeks writing task was how your body works so i chose to do how you breathe.
How you breathe
Firstly you breathe in the oxygen with your nose, then it goes in your nostril. After that it goes down your windpipe then goes out your bronchi’s into your lungs then the oxygen and carbon dioxide gets exchanged. Your diaphragm contracts when you breathe in and expands when you breathe out.
That’s how you breath.
Did you know how you breathed?
Hope you enjoyed my writing.
Hi Michael, I can tell you did some research before you started your writing task because you have used some medical terms. However, I think you could have explained the process of breathing even further. For example, you could have used subheadings for each section of information and explained the process in small paragraphs.
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