I enjoyed reading your piece of writing from this week. I like how you discovered your mini beast and named him! Remember, a name should always begin with a capital letter.
I liked the problem you included in your story, which was you and your mini beast getting lost. You did a great job describing what happened when you had to eat spiders, maybe you can try an include more describing words throughout your writing.
Also make sure you double check for any grammar errors, for example you have a lot of "i" when it needs to be a capital (I).
I enjoyed reading your piece of writing from this week. I like how you discovered your mini beast and named him! Remember, a name should always begin with a capital letter.
ReplyDeleteI liked the problem you included in your story, which was you and your mini beast getting lost. You did a great job describing what happened when you had to eat spiders, maybe you can try an include more describing words throughout your writing.
Also make sure you double check for any grammar errors, for example you have a lot of "i" when it needs to be a capital (I).
It was a little bit hard to read but the paragraphs were really easy to understand.
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